Related Video Collections
All Comments
My MMSS (Major Movie Star Sister)? Hi!
This is the first part of my story called My MMSS (Major Movie Star Sister). Please read the first part and give me opinions and suggestions. Please no rude comments, because I'm only twelve so I know it's just a dumb story. Please tell me if you want to hear the second part. Thanks!
~~~~
“So, why do you like your sister? What does she do that’s really nice and really kind?”
“Nothing.”
“Excuse me?”
“She doesn’t do anything nice and kind, and I don’t like her. She’s mean and cranky and never gives me her stuff. Ugly, too.”
“Oh, um – really?”
“Yup. I like my brother though. He’s nice.”
“Just a sec. Tell us more about your sister.”
“Okay! She always – ”
I groaned and switched off the television, throwing myself back into the soft, plum couch. My head was swirling. Stupid, stupid, stupid. The word kept repeating itself in my mind. Fume blew out of my ears and I’m positive my face was tomato-red. My eyebrows were permanently drawn up in angry crisscrosses.
I looked around our huge living room, wanting to calm down. I didn’t even notice the wooden floor-boards, the plasma television, the brown coffee-tables, the grand piano, and the Oriental rugs. But what I did notice was the huge framed picture above the glass cabinet of little ornaments.
In the picture was a smiling girl in front of a backdrop of the ocean. Her curly jet-black hair fell over her shoulders, and her big, deep, dark blue eyes could melt a heart. Dimples were in her cheeks and her petite, rose-bud nose fit in perfectly with the rest of her fair features.
That girl was my sister.
Starr Love Everheart.
You’ve probably heard of her, haven’t you? She is a huge guy celebrity, even though she’s only eight. She’s been in about, what, seven movies? And she’s also recorded a few cute little guy songs and voiced two or three cartoons. Everyone loves her and thinks she’s so adorable, with her button nose and curly ringlets and all.
But, as you can tell, I’m just a bit jealous of her.
Okay, okay. I guess I’m more than a bit jealous.
I mean, my parents think that it’s so cute that Starr’s famous, but whenever I ask them with a pretty please if they could get me in the business, they go, “No way. You’re thirteen years old and need to focus on your studies. We’ll get Jade settled down in a few years, too.”
Now, my parents work in the movie industry, as producers for big-time movies, so they could get me in a movie if they wanted to.
Read back on the words: wanted to.
When Starr was born, they wanted to name her something extraordinary. Maybe they knew she was going to be famous. Starr Love. Her actual name is Starr Love.
My name is really ordinary: Abby.
Couldn’t they have named me Elidorah Daydream or something? It sounds way cooler then Abby Winters.
Mom and Dad changed Starr’s last name to Everheart, because Starr Love Winters didn’t sound ‘famous’. (How does Starr Love Winters not sound famous?) Everheart is my great-aunt’s last name.
So I ask them, what do I sound like? Chopped liver? They don’t bother changing my last name to Everheart, which, by the way, was given by me.
(I was lounging around one day, moping about how I loved the last name Everheart, and the next thing I knew, it was Starr Love Everheart and Abby Winters. Unfair? You got it, buddy.)
In case you’re wondering, Starr isn’t the youngest, thank goodness. Or she’d be even more spoilt. My brother, Ross, is five and he loves Starr. He does anything she says and sometimes the two pair up against me. Sometimes I think it would be better if Starr actually was the youngest and Ross was like, fifteen or something. Then we could pair up against her.
Well, that day, I happened to be flipping through the channels on our huge, plasma television. The rest of the family had gone to this interview for Starr, and I didn’t want to go.
I mean, it was like rubbing salt in my wounds! (I happen to want to be an actress or singer when I grow up and I am still wanting.)
So, I was watching TV and then I saw this blown-up picture of Starr, striking her ‘movie-star pose’ in our garden, which is one hand on her head, the other hand on her hip. She was flashing a charming smile, her hair windblown.
“Guy star, Starr Love Everheart, does it again as she stars in a hit comedy!” A voice said as the picture dissolved. A tall, leggy woman with bright pink and blonde hair sat on a strawberry-red couch with my sister beside her. I recognized the lady as Olivia Sky, a famous talk show host known world-wide. It was live that moment, probably the interview Starr was at now.
So then Olivia and Starr had the conversation about me (listed above) and stupid Starr started saying all that stuff.
Even when I wasn’t there, Starr just had to make fun of me.
After I turned the television off and looked around, I could feel my cheeks burning. I pushed back strands of black hair.
Everyone in school would be teasing me the next day, since eve | | You will be a great writer one day, you are only 12 and you can write like this, not every one can do, I am not going to correct your grammar or critic your story, I only like to encourage you to write more and let someone who is good in English and in writing novel edit. Good luck | Christmas movie with little girl named abby? I was wondering if anyone knew of this old christmas movie. it has two guyren in it and all I remember is that they were going through a forest in the winter and it was all snowy and they came across an "ogar" and there is a song in it that goes " is there a father christmas you sure" thats all I remember about it. Ive been trying to find the name of this movie for years and have found nothing so far.hope you can help, Thanks | | I think "One Magic Christmas" is the name of the movie you're looking for. | I just saw the movie "The Last Winter" and I am really confused.? I didn't get the end with Pollack and Hoffman. He saw the boy running to his house and he went over all that land. What happened to those two?
What was the significance of the crows?
What happened to Dawn, because she was missing. Her body at least.
How did Maxwell cross all that land without any footprints?
What was that creature supposed to be anyway?
And finally, I have no Idea what the very last scene with Abby meant.
If you can answer any of these questions,please help me understand :) | | Watch it again... You might ''get it then'' | Do you think im a good author? please comment. and be HONEST? ive always been self concious and my frind told me to post some of one of my stories on here. only my family and my best freind has read them ecause im scared people wont like it.....PLEASE BE HONEST THOUGH!
if you think i need more improvment tell me!
The pilot announced. I was so excited! I had been waiting for this time since birth. I was with my best friend, Sam, and it was the first day of winter break. We came here together for our eighteenth birthday. We were staying at Whiteside Castle, a white fortress with humongous brick walls that stood on top of a large grassy hill. The castle was old and it was being sold, so we were the last people to stay in it. My mom had insisted on me calling when I got to the castle. We started shuffling out as Sam had pulled out his camera and was taking pictures of our surroundings. I could see the castle we were staying in and it was even prettier than I expected. There was green ivy creeping up pillars in the front and the stone was cracked in certain areas that made it look like an artifact from four million years ago. There was a river in the front and a stone bridge. The mountains were covered in snow and the sun glimmered off it in the best way possible.
"I can’t believe we get to stay there, it feels like a dream. A dream that I hope never ends!" Sam said. He had short blond hair. His eyes were light blue with a tint of green. He was wearing black jeans and a black shirt with a small ACDC sign on the front with white wings on the back.
"I know, I can’t wait to get to the castle, did you see the size of that thing. It looks so old." I replied. We walked into the airport to get our luggage and then looked around for our driver. There was a tall thin man with a sign that said "Abigail Willow." That was my last name. My full name was Abigail Genevieve Willow.
"Sam over there," I said gesturing to the man with the sign. Sam smiled in reply and started toward him. I grabbed my luggage and followed.
"You must be Ms. Willow," the man said with a heavy accent. He wore a black and white suit that looked like it was just bought. A nametag on the pocket of his suit said "Mr. Cumin."
"Yes sir and you must be Mr. Cumin," I said shaking hands with the man. His hands were very cold. When they hit mine I felt the need to pull away and make a run for it.
"Yes ma’am, and who might this young man be?" he asked eyeing Sam.
Sam held out a hand replying, "Sam Motony, Abby’s best friend." Mr. Cumin took Sam’s hand and shook it half heartedly. He turned around and took us down a large hall to the door leading to the parking lot. He had his car parked at the front of the airport. It looked just like a car I saw in those old F.B.I. movies. He took our bags and tossed them in the trunk.
"Go ahead and hop in so we can get on our way," Mr. Cumin said. Mr. Cumin opened the car door and hurried us inside. Sam sat in the passenger seat as I jumped in back. The seats were made of a fresh leather material and the air smelled of coconut car freshener with an underlying hint of new car smell that made me wonder if the car was new. He turned the keys softly and the engine could barely be heard. We were out of the parking lot and on the highway in no time.
"To the right is a small town where you can buy extra supplies if you need any. The river, as you can see, is straight up ahead and the rest is all forest." Cumin smiled in appreciation. He turned to smile at us and…
All of a sudden his motor control of the car was lost and we slid off the road and into a huge elm tree that made impact on the passenger side of the car. I heard something crack and then everything went dark… | Ok, well you defintaly have the promise to be a writer one day. But you need to not be so direct. For exmaple your writing kind of reminds me of this. He walked to the store. He had blond hair. He bought a snack.
The thing is you don't want to read a novel like that you want to almost believe that you are a part of the novel not a bystander.
""I can’t believe we get to stay there, it feels like a dream. A dream that I hope never ends!" Sam said. He had short blond hair. His eyes were light blue with a tint of green. He was wearing black jeans and a black shirt with a small ACDC sign on the front with white wings on the back.
A better way to word this paragraph so it had more depth would be.
"I can't believe we get to stay here." Sam gasped, his sky blue eyes darting around taking everything in. "Like a dream I never want to end." Sam said while ruffling about his short blond hair. He had on his usual uniform a pair of black jeans with a band tee; the band for today acdc.
I really hope that helps! The story line seems really good. I just high suggest rewriting some of those paragraphs so that they entice the reader more. Good luck! | What should i add to my wish list? 1. I – touch
2. Uggs (bear claw brad is cheaper)
3. Wii
4. Laptop
5. Gift cards: Hollister, American eagle, JCP, love Culture, Abercrombie, Aeropostal, Payless, Kohl’s, Old Navy,
6. New bed set w/ matching curtains (purple)
7. Jewelry
8. The proposal (movie)
9. Sweats
10. Make up; Eye Shadow , Mascara , Blush , Cover Up , Foundation , Lip Gloss
11. $Money$
12. CD’s
13. Cell Phone ( slider with QWERTY keyboard)
14. White Skinny Jeans
15. I love you Beth Cooper (movie)
16. Instyler rotating iron straighter
17. Heat Protecting Spray for hair
18. Tousle me Softly for hair
19. Miranda cosgrove CD
20. Pink Mascara
21. Miley Cyrus Breakout CD
22. Selena Gomez CD
23. Demi Lavato CD
24. Wizards of Waverly place The movie (movie)
25. She’s the man ( movie)
26. What a girl wants (movie)
27. Mrs. congeniality (movie)
28. Fist daughter (movie)
29. Sydney white (movie)
30. Slippers
31. Nail Polish
32. Sasha purple boot from Payless (size 7 ½ )
33. Connie Chestnut Suede Brown Boot from Famous Footwear (size 7 ½)
34. Water Proof Radio For Showers
35. Body Mist / Perfume
36. Gigaware Wireless Speakers For Ipod from radio shack
37. Sunglasses
38. Trampoline w/ net
39. Puppy Wireless Ipod Headphones
40. Scarves (but not winter scarves)
41. Flat Screen TV
42. Hannah Montana (movie)
43. first kiss fleece toggle jacket from kohl’s (black)
44. IZ byer California houndstooth coat from kohl’s
45. Self esteem zebra trench coat from kohl’s
46. Say what sherpa hooded jacket from kohl’s (red)
47. Candies newmie tall boot – kohl’s (black)
48. Say what plaid sherpa jacket –kohl’s (coffee combo)
49. Mudd checkered fur trim vest – kohl’s (black and white)
50. Secret life of an American teenager seasons 1&2
51. Footy PJ’s for teens
52. Mudd checkered fur trim vest kohl’s (black and white) .
53. Mud distressed flare jean - kohl's
54. Bongo bootcut jean - kohl's
55. SO silver tone peace sign and drop earring set
56. SO griffen plaid flats -kohl's
57. Abby dawn bangle bracelet set - kohl's
58. Abby dawn silver tone bangle bracelet set - kohl's
59. SO silver tone heart drop earring set - kohl's
60. SO silver tone crystal heart ring set – kohl’s
61. Sterling silver marcasite star ring - kohl’s
62. Abby dawn silver tone silver heart necklace - kohl’s
63. SO stripped sweater - kohl's (black and white)
64. Snuggie
65. Woman’s cable knit berets - old navy ( black)
66. Woman’s stripped sweater knit slipper socks -old navy
67. Denim skinny jeans
68. Photo board
69. Sleep mask
70. Make-Up Brushes
71. Wireless Keyboard
72. Mind Flex
73. | | 72 things? WOW. I think your covered. :) |
|